tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1245901282520572842.post3330491030167270876..comments2013-09-09T10:05:29.469-07:00Comments on FRIEDRICH....: Entry #8 Peer AssesmentFriedrich!http://www.blogger.com/profile/08394554712981538300noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1245901282520572842.post-39476086506442935282013-06-11T09:49:43.292-07:002013-06-11T09:49:43.292-07:00First of all, I want to say that I loved what you ...First of all, I want to say that I loved what you wrote, it is very passionate and interesting. I think that as a reflection, it is a good insight into what we, as a society, sometimes do. In terms of coherence, your topic sentences and concluding sentence are related to each other and to the rest of the paragraph. The use of connectors is very good and also, the use of complex sentences and academic vocabulary. There is some probably unintentional repetition you could improve and the sentence: “Critical thought not only help us to realize what is good(...)” should be: Critical thought not only helps us realize. All in all, I found it very clear and appealing and it was a very thought-provoking experience to read it.Sol Foshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00234512566518204615noreply@blogger.com